Hello, Everyone! I really appreciate all who have been reading the little snippets from my novel, and although it may take me a while to get back to you, I will do my best to reply to all comments!
Here is another “snippet”… Feel free to comment, and I hope you enjoy it!
Recap: Katie arrived in Scotland from the United States the day before and is staying with her estranged mother, Liz, who seems quite scattered and disorganized for someone who hasn’t seen her daughter in 10 years. Last night, Katy was surprised to hear Liz coming back from somewhere at 2 in the morning and has no idea where she went…
A whistle woke me. Then the sound of feet thumping across floorboards, a woman sneezing, and finally I was able to pry my eyelids open. Sleep hung over me like a soggy blanket. Where was I?
I pushed myself up and felt around for my glasses. They were under my pillow. So was a brown bottle of oily liquid, labeled “Sinus Surprise Therapeutic Oil.” Then I remembered.
“Mom?” I called
The whistling stopped. “Yes?” Mom poked her head out of the kitchen.
“I thought you’d left me,” I said, before realizing how babyish I sounded. Mom came over and sat down on the couch, her hip against mine, warm and reassuring. She must have been boiling water for tea. I imagined the steam from cups of tea, warming her tiny kitchen, scrambled eggs and buttered toast on the coffee table for breakfast, and smiled.
“Come on, sleepyhead.” Mom yanked my blankets down, and I gasped at the cold air on my bare arms. She handed me a pair of felt slippers shaped like bananas.
“What time is it?”
“Four o’clock.” Dark circles hung under her eyes.
“Why are you up so early?” I asked, shoving my feet into the bananas for warmth.
“It’s a long drive to Ullapool, and we want to get there before dark.”
“Where? What?” Was I still dreaming?
Mom clapped her hands together. “A surprise treat for you, Katy! We’re going on a tour of the Highlands, all the way up to Ullapool on the west coast. Won’t that be nice? You’ll get to take lots of pictures to send to your dad, and we’ll ride in a ferry and maybe even see the Loch Ness monster!”
“Loch Ness?” That woke me up. Ever since I saw the movie, “Water Horse,” about a boy who finds a special egg that hatches into a sea dragon, I’ve wanted to try to spot the Loch Ness monster.
Mom hopped off the bed, scooping up a pair of tights from the floor and stuffing them into a tote bag made out of what looked like shoelaces.
She handed me a granola bar. “Here’s breakfast.”
I forgot my camera in the rush to get our bags packed – Mom said to only take a few things from my suitcase and put them in my backpack because we couldn’t use the trunk. Aunt Claire had run over a cat the night before. She’d put the dead cat in the “boot” of the car to bury later.
“Why did she do that?” And where had she been driving to last night? I suddenly remembered my mom creeping into the flat at two in the morning and wondered if I should ask her about it.
“Och, you know your aunt; always an animal lover! She wanted to give the cat a proper burial, somewhere nice and scenic up in the Highlands.”
“Really?” I tried to imagine Aunt Claire wiping her eyes over a little mound of dirt and placing pink flowers under a cross made out of popsicle sticks. All I could think of was her shrieking at getting mud on her fancy leather boots.
“Um, Mom? Did you go out for tea bags or something last night?”
She looked at me strangely. “No. Why?”
“I thought I heard the front door opening, that’s all.” I blushed.
“Och, it’s probably just jet lag. You’re exhausted, and your mind’s’ playing tricks on you!”
“Hmm. It didn’t seem like my imagination. Did you go outside to check the mail or something?”
“For goodness’ sake, Katy. I didn’t go anywhere!”
“Okay, okay.” Obviously I’d had some kind of out-of-body experience where I’d hallucinated the door closing and floorboards creaking. It had happened before when I was five and we’d just driven 11 hours from visiting Aunt Marsha in New York City. Dad put me to bed, and two hours later, I’d sleep-walked downstairs and began crying when I couldn’t get my arm into my coat sleeve. Dad found me in the coat closet, wrestling with a giant scarf and jabbering about going to the jungle to get more bananas.
We ran down the street, Mom’s shoelace-bag bouncing up and down behind her like a flag. I dragged myself along, wincing as the cold air pierced my nostrils. The sky was already tinged with pale blue, hinting at the promise of a sunny day. The stars had started to fade and only a few remained, blinking lazily.
Aunt Claire stood smoking beside her car, which was parked in the middle of the street. She wore a huge pair of sunglasses, and I wondered how she was going to see when it wasn’t even daylight yet. She jerked her head at us to get in and then threw her cigarette butt onto the ground and mashed it with the toe of her boot.
“Do you think it’ll start?” I asked from the back seat as Aunt Claire got in. “Do you need to rock it?”
“Hmph! Smart arse.” Aunt Claire turned the key, and the car made a whining noise as though it didn’t want to get up this early either, but then the engine caught and we all let out a sigh of relief.
The streets were empty, so Aunt Claire took every corner at blazing speed, bumping over the cobbled streets of the older parts of the city and making the whole car rattle. I hoped we’d make it to the Highlands without the car falling apart.
Tall buildings stood dark in their own shadows, as the sun hovered low in the horizon, not yet ready to make the climb. Mom pulled something out of her pocket. I leaned forward – it was a silver chain with a crystal pyramid pointing to the floor.
“Not the pendulum again!” Aunt Claire stared at the roof as though begging God to please give her a break.
Mom sat up straight and frowned at her sister. “It will guide us in our journey.”
“I thought the map was supposed to guide us,” I said.
“Shh! I have to concentrate.” Mom closed her eyes and breathed in and out loudly. “Should we take the A82? Or should we take the A9?”
“The A82 will take forever,” Aunt Claire blurted out.
“We’re not in a hurry, are we?” I wanted to see Loch Ness and castles and sheep!
“Ssshh!” Mom stared at the crystal. “Ah ha!” She nodded encouragingly as it began to move in circles. To me, it looked like Aunt Claire’s jerky steering was causing the crystal to move, but what did I know?
“We will take the A-82,” Mom declared.
“Fine!” Aunt Claire squealed the brakes and made a huge U-turn in the middle of the street, just about causing the car to flip over.
“Take it easy!” Mom gripped the dashboard.
“Thank God for seatbelts,” I mumbled.
“What was that?” Aunt Claire glared at me in the rear-view mirror through her gigantic sunglasses.
As we drove out of the city, the sun climbed higher, turning all the stone buildings and trees a beautiful golden-red color, and we all sighed at the sight. But then, almost immediately, clouds piled into the sky, as though late for work, and swallowed the sun up.
“Typical,” said Aunt Claire.
We passed the same hilly suburbs and fields as the day before, but under the gray sky, the purple-green hills and yellow flowers seemed “drab” (one of Mom’s words) and lifeless. And then the rain came, spattering onto the windshield and blurring Aunt Claire’s view. She slowed a little, but her driving still felt jerkier than the day before.
Cold began to seep up my legs, and I rubbed my knees to keep warm. Mom yawned and dozed in the passenger seat, while Aunt Claire turned the heater on high, which only fogged up the windshield and made the car smell like burnt rubber and dead cat.
I studied the back of Mom’s head, her long brown hair spilling over her shoulder as she slumped to the right. Her hair fluttered in the wind from her open window, and I had the urge to touch it and see if it felt like mine, which was shorter and darker. Also, mine was bone-straight, like Dad’s blond hair, while Mom’s had a loose wave in it. Was it soft like mine, or coarse? I leaned forward, but something held me back – a voice: “Don’t do it; you’ll just get hurt.” And I believed that voice because I’d been hurt in the past.
Love – sleep hung over me like a soggy blanket! Brilliant 😃
Thanks, Ruth! 🙂
I really enjoyed reading your fifth snippet… You are doing great with them..
Thanks, Katie! I’m glad you like them — it keeps me motivated to keep writing! 🙂 Hope your writing is going well, and have a great weekend!
I hope you had a great weekend too….:)
Hi Louisa, I really enjoyed this. You give a good sense of how chaotic her mum is, and you capture Katie’s uncertainty–and fear of being hurt by her mum–well. I particularly liked the scene with the pendulum as it is a great metaphor for their relationship, and Katie’s mum generally. Well done! I look forward to reading more! 🙂
Thanks, Kendra! That is a great point about the pendulum — I just had this image in my head of her mother swinging a pendulum, something a bit “wacky” but also giving a clue to her personality. You are right; it’s a good metaphor for the ups and downs of their relationship (especially from Katy’s point of view!).